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Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 15, 2012 11:50 pm

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8050441/1/Code_Lyoko_Rookie_ReWritten_Edition



After much pain, aggony, confusion, self-reliance, and some sneaky moves, CL: Rookie has finally been re-written on FF.net! With perfect spacing, better quality, and longer length, CL: Rookie will satisfy even the most stictest reader. I hope.



Summary:

Season 1 is where it all started. It was where we met our favorite heroes. But, there's one we don't know about. One that has been shrouded in mystery. His name is Jonas Rutherford. CL: Rookie is a dive into the imagination of me, who has drastically re-visioned Season 1. Jonas, a young kid about the same age as Ulrich, comes to Kadic Academy. His fahter and mother are divorced, his 22 year old brother watches over him, his father is deployed in Iraq, and his mother does not stay with him and Tim.

But, Jonas never expected he would be the victim of a XANA attack. After the near death experience, Jonas is now forced to help fight XANA at all costs....

Little does he know about the shadey past of John and Cheryl Rutherford, his parents. Once, they lived a life of peace. But, all that ends when a mission in Iraq goes wrong, landing him in the sights of an evil organization that has connections to the dark past that his father has.

CL: Rookie combines great action with awesome detail and also throws inspiration into the mix. Inspiration such as the show "24", "Battlefield 3", "Medal of Honor", "Halo", and much more! All of them combined brings the most suspenseful, detailed, thrilling, action-packed Code Lyoko fan-fiction ever devised!

Over 800 views accumalated in CL:V and reviewed by 3 critics, as one of the best fan-fics yet!



Technosam gives CL: Rookie-95/100 (A)


I have to say, this really is one of the coolest FanFictions I've read. Extremely well put together, the story is GREAT!
I love the back-story, and I can' wait to hear more in the sequel. Even though I generally don't like OC's being thrown in with Team Lyoko (The exception being Next-Gen Fics), you did a great job working in the new character. And it looks like we might be getting another addition!
Overall, the story just fits together so well. Really, it's great!
How come it didn't get 100%? No one's perfect. There very little I can dislike about this.

As I've said previously, more people need to read this. It's fantastic. I'll see what I can do...

Atlas501 says-

Just wanted to let you know that the work you put into this story really shows. Excellent work.
I've only read a little bit, but just the additions of the soundtrack, as well as good formatting and presentation means MILES to my interest.

I can't praise you enough for this story.

Soul_Jelly says-

Only read the intro, but this is cool so far. Good writing and I like the fact that it has a soundtrack, it's a nice touch. I look forward to reading the rest when I have time.

SMARTAgentKC gave CL: Rookie- 88/100 (B+)

Very well written, I saw it on CLV but never had the chance to fully read it. Well I finally did and I wasn't disappointed.


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Chapter 1-2

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Fri Apr 20, 2012 8:44 pm

Reviews are greatly asked for!!!!! Very Happy



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Soundtrack List

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Fri Apr 20, 2012 8:46 pm

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7lHWckOi ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Death of Vladmir
CL: Rookie- What Could've Been

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rC9bw6Vj ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Solomon
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=klTNgcFW ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Thunder Run
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qUusOaQe ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Frostbite
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NTdC7tqV ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Hunter's Point
CL: Rookie-


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v_d5a-d4 ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Fire From The Sky
CL: Rookie- In Time

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=us6XchQB ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Operation: Metro
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=63HJ4toc ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Black Gold
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ePS-EYbW ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Kaffarov's Villa
CL: Rookie-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F1ZFiwWNdZ0
Medal of Honor- Heroes Abroad
CL: Rookie- Brothers and Sisters in Arms

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1FR0Ssc3Cdk
Medal of Honor- The Summit
CL: Rookie- Together

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FLuQd5CH ... re=related
Battlefield 3- Main Theme
CL: Rookie- Code Lyoko: Rookie

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1TzPiXY ... re=related
Battlefield 3- The Great Destroyer
CL: Rookie- XANA

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5c9qCqOM ... re=related
Battlefield 3- La Bourse (The Exchange)
CL: Rookie- Chasing Villains

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6Rlkau_kcGc
J-Punch- Count Me Out
CL: Rookie- Series Main Theme

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1f8CGRtW ... re=related
Dead Rising- Carlito Keyes
CL: Rookie-
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by SMARTAgentKC on Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:16 pm

Peacekeeper, We have a few minor guidelines that must be followed.

http://www.xanaslair.com/t45-posting-a-story

The main one is that you can't post your story directly here.
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:48 am

That's..... gonna be tough.... Sad
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by Eilorae on Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:51 am

Ff.net my friend, ^.^
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 1:09 am

Still tough, my friend.
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by Atlas on Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:18 pm

I agree with Peace. We need to review this whole story ruleset imho.

In the meantime, do what you can Peace.

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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by SeeMeInTheShadows on Sat Apr 21, 2012 3:12 pm

But as for now, if you have somewhere that you could link it to, that'd be fantastic.

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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:41 pm

I can try. Sad
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 22, 2012 6:41 pm

UPDATED! Yes, it works! Yeah!!!!! Here you go ladies and gents!
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by SMARTAgentKC on Sun Apr 22, 2012 8:43 pm

Very well written, I saw it on CLV but never had the chance to fully read it. Well I finally did and I wasn't disappointed.

88/100
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 22, 2012 9:08 pm

Well, can you explain why did I get an 88/100? I like to know what I can fix. Very Happy
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by SMARTAgentKC on Sun Apr 22, 2012 9:23 pm

Your Format while acceptable to some does not quite flow with me.

I prefer that your chapters are seperated into actual chapters for easier reading instead of having to read one giant document.

I gave you a decent rating for the story but the format was off therefore I reduced points,
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 22, 2012 9:25 pm

Okay. I'll work on formatting.
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 22, 2012 9:30 pm

But, I'm glad that you enjoyed the story, SMARTAgentKC. Smile
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun Apr 22, 2012 9:33 pm

Code Lyoko: Rookie fanbase is being created right now! Smile



The fan base will include critics, regular readers, fanboys, fan-girls, and any other kind of fans! So, any fans of the series can join the upcoming CL: Rookie FanBase! Very Happy
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Re: Code Lyoko Rookie- Updated Verion Released

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Tue Apr 24, 2012 9:47 pm

Rookie 3 Announcment Poster and Announcement
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NEW ANNOUNCEMENT!

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Mon Jul 23, 2012 2:45 am



New announcement:

Code Lyoko: Rookie- Extended Cut Edition is coming soon! This new story edition will include almost 10 new bonus chapters to the back-story and main story, behind-the-scenes logs, new official posters, and more! Experience Code Lyoko: Rookie in its most complete form! New chapters, characters, and experiences never before seen in it's original state. New posters will be up fro grabs for Extended Cut Edition! Releasing later in time!
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