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I dream of Eleanor

Post by Smartguy5000 on Sun May 20, 2012 8:51 am

Link: www.fanfiction.net/s/8091931/1/I_dream_of_Eleanor
Summary: JxA songfic. Aelita has a nightmare. Rated for content Just in case
Rating: T
WC: 1,892
Chapters: 2

Please Review! I need criticism almost as much as I need air!

EDIT: I'll fix the link after 7 days.


Last edited by SMARTAgentKC on Sun May 20, 2012 1:59 pm; edited 2 times in total (Reason for editing : Link fixed)
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Re: I dream of Eleanor

Post by SMARTAgentKC on Sun May 20, 2012 2:01 pm

Your story format is heavily messed up. You need to do some editing so that it looks better. When you first upload a document preview and edit it so that it doesn't look like it does now.
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Re: I dream of Eleanor

Post by Smartguy5000 on Sun May 20, 2012 2:56 pm

I got rid of the double spacing in the body paragraphs, do you think it looks better now?
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Re: I dream of Eleanor

Post by PeaceKeeper2014 on Sun May 20, 2012 3:01 pm

Nice to see a new writer here. Smile I agree with KC, however. Formating is really important, so it's best to keep it in mind. Overall, it looks better. Just keep at it and you'll do better! Very Happy
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Post by SMARTAgentKC on Sun May 20, 2012 9:00 pm

Much Better, It's a nice little clean one shot.
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Re: I dream of Eleanor

Post by Smartguy5000 on Sun May 20, 2012 9:04 pm

Thanks! I'm going to be uploading another story tonight I think...
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