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Avntura (Excprt)

Post by Stella Luce 333 on Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:03 am



Bord games arn't suppsd to be hard to play. But Avntura isn't yor avrge bord game...Insprd by Jumnji.

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"Alita…What's your biggest fear?" I asked slowly.

"Oh no." Od said. "Please tell me it's not what I think it is…"

"It's ok, Stones." Jim said gently. "We just want to know what we're up against."

"Hello Alita." said a voce behind us. Even though the lights were out, the cafeteria had huge windows that were letting a lot of light in.

"Willem Dunbar!" Jim said. "Are you trying to get yourself killed? You're supposed to stay in your room!"

"Uh…Jim?" Od said as he moved to stand beside Alita, who had also stood when Willem had spoken. "That's not really Willem…"




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Post by Atlas on Wed Sep 14, 2011 11:23 am

I'll give it a read when I have time.

There's been something I've wanted to ask for a while, but I never really thought of a good way to do it. So I'll just ask straight out.

Stella, English isn't your first language right?
It seems you have trouble when dealing with vowels in particular.

Please don't take this the wrong way, I'm just curious.

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Re: Avntura (Excprt)

Post by Eilorae on Wed Sep 14, 2011 12:43 pm

It's good. I've read a small part only though.
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Re: Avntura (Excprt)

Post by Stella Luce 333 on Thu Sep 15, 2011 6:21 am

Nope, Englsh is my first langge...I'm just terrble at spellng! I did take Spansh in high schol, thogh, if you're wondrng how I came up with the title...


I'm glad that you guys like it! I was obssesd with Robn Willems when I was yongr, & Jumnji was one of my faves...
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